THE JOY OF COLOURS - #MYFRIENDALEXA 2021 - GOLDEN

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 GOLDEN

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She was driving at full speed now. The sun shone down, fierce and golden.

The words of the doctor were echoing in her mind.

“Ms. Deshpande, you have a growth in your stomach. I am afraid it is malignant which gives you less than six months to live.” His voice was grave, and she found herself wondering why he needed to put on an act. After all, he was in the profession of doling out bad news.

She had unfinished work. She was on her way to remedy that. Especially now that she was living on borrowed time.

The sunrays filled the car with golden warmth.

She rang the bell. He stood there, handsome as ever, and her treacherous heart skipped a beat. How could she still be so gullible after what he had done to her.

“Hi, Sonia, how stunning you look!” The words flowed like honey, golden and glib.

She smiled at him. “Thank you, Derek! Always the charmer, aren’t you?”

He ushered her in, the charm washing over her, as it had always done.

“Sit down! Let me get you a cup of filter coffee.” As the aroma of brewing coffee assailed her nostrils, she made a quick phone call.

He knew her so well. Why wouldn’t he? They had lived together for years till he decided to marry the daughter of a wealthy businessman.

“That will be a marriage of convenience,” he had promised. “You are the one who holds my heart. You know that.”

She did know that. She was like a heady drug to him. He could never think of letting her go. Even though he had broken her heart myriad times by cheating on her. A layer of ice had encased her heart every time.

As she sipped the coffee, they made desultory conversation. He put his arm around her, his voice animated as she watched him from under her eyelashes.

“Could I have a sandwich? I am starving,” she said, smiling at him.

“Of course, sweetheart. Your favourite ham sandwich coming up!” He whistled as he bustled around, toasting the bread to perfection.

She took the little vial from her bag. It had cost her quite a bit to get the right one.

One more final phone call! Then it was time.

She tipped the contents of the vial into her mouth. The six months she had left dissolved away into nothingness.

As he buttered the golden toast, nonchalantly humming a tune under his breath, he heard the sirens in the distance, little aware that they were making a beeline to his door.

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  1. Pranab Mullick9/16/2021 07:53:00 PM

    Awesome. Like a scorpion, the sting lay in the tail :)

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    1. deepti menon9/17/2021 02:22:00 PM

      Thank you so much, Pranab! That is exactly the effect I was looking for. :)

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  2. Tomichan Matheikal9/16/2021 09:22:00 PM

    I wish it didn't have to end this way!

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    1. deepti menon9/17/2021 02:23:00 PM

      This was the most suspenseful ending I could come up with! :)

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  3. Musings of a Pioneer9/16/2021 10:12:00 PM

    Great story

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  4. beingFab9/17/2021 11:16:00 AM

    Whoa, I didn't see that coming! Very well written!

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    1. deepti menon9/17/2021 02:41:00 PM

      Thank you, beingFab, for this comment and for the retweet on Twitter.

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  5. Harshita Nanda9/17/2021 02:15:00 PM

    That was quite some twist

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    1. deepti menon9/17/2021 02:42:00 PM

      Dear Harshita, thank you so much. I am glad the twist came through. :)

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  6. deepti menon9/17/2021 02:24:00 PM

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  7. Savita9/17/2021 05:37:00 PM

    Deepti, one always looks for the end in your stories, quite a suspense😍, thoroughly enjoyed!

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    1. deepti menon9/20/2021 07:11:00 PM

      Thank you so much, Mrs. Thapliyal, for your heartwarming comment. I am thrilled! :)

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  8. Jenifer9/20/2021 09:41:00 AM

    Wow! Wonderful write up. Short & crispy as i like to read.

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    1. deepti menon9/20/2021 07:11:00 PM

      Thank you so much, Jennifer! I am glad you enjoyed the read.

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  9. Siddhant Agarwal9/20/2021 11:10:00 AM

    Excellently penned!

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    1. deepti menon9/20/2021 07:12:00 PM

      Thank you ever so much, Siddhant! I value your opinion!

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  10. Seema B9/21/2021 12:07:00 AM

    Didn't see that coming. Shocking end.

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    1. deepti menon9/21/2021 10:29:00 AM

      Thank you so much! That was the effect I was going for. :)

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  11. Pratibha9/21/2021 02:09:00 PM

    Oh! Now I want to know what else could have happened! Damn. #MyepicaReads

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    1. deepti menon9/22/2021 09:09:00 PM

      Pratibha, that would be a whole different saga! :)

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  12. Aesha Shah9/22/2021 05:15:00 PM

    That was quite a suprising twist! Did not expect at all.

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    1. deepti menon9/22/2021 09:09:00 PM

      Thank you, Aesha! I am happy that the twist surprised you. :)

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  13. Richa Mina9/23/2021 12:52:00 PM

    it's just momentary decisions that leads to radical steps. I can't say that i'm happy with the ending but i don't know how else could you have justified the story.

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    1. deepti menon9/24/2021 07:27:00 PM

      Richa, thank you for your discerning comment. There are many decisions which may be right or wrong, but the characters decide on their own.

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  14. GB9/24/2021 06:54:00 PM

    This was like a short psycho thriller! Just loved it!

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    1. deepti menon9/24/2021 07:28:00 PM

      That's music to my ears, GB! Thank you ever so much!

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  15. Jayanthi9/24/2021 11:57:00 PM

    OMG!

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  16. Neha Jain9/25/2021 02:10:00 PM

    Wow!! this left me unsettled and I tried to finish it in my head with different endings. Great!

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    1. deepti menon9/25/2021 08:42:00 PM

      Neha, I am thrilled that you tried finishing this story with different endings. I do hope you did not guess the actual one. :) Thank you for your comment.

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  17. Satabdi9/26/2021 10:50:00 AM

    Oh my! Revenge!!

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  18. Neerja Bhatnagar9/26/2021 12:34:00 PM

    What a twist !

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    1. deepti menon9/26/2021 11:28:00 PM

      Neerja, thank you so much. I am glad the twist worked.

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  19. Shipra Trivedi9/27/2021 12:40:00 AM

    I was imagining a Bollywood type flow of story and but it ends with a great twist. Kudos.

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    1. deepti menon9/29/2021 06:42:00 PM

      Thank you so much, Shipra! I am thrilled that you enjoyed the twist.

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  20. Harjeet Kaur9/27/2021 12:58:00 PM

    I don't like sad endings :( My life itself is a tragedy and reading such stories makes me feel very sad.

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    1. deepti menon9/29/2021 06:43:00 PM

      I am really sorry to hear that, Harjeet. I do hope your life becomes easier.

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  21. Cindy D'Silva9/27/2021 04:49:00 PM

    Oh gosh. I want to know what happened after the police entered...

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    1. deepti menon9/29/2021 06:43:00 PM

      Now that's an idea for another story, Cindy! :)

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  22. Swati9/27/2021 08:29:00 PM

    OMG... Didn't see that coming.. What a twist. Loved the suspense.

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    1. deepti menon9/29/2021 06:43:00 PM

      That's music to my ears, Swati! Thank you so much.

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  23. Deepa9/27/2021 10:33:00 PM

    It is a short and interesting story. The surprise was the twist in the end.

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    1. deepti menon9/29/2021 06:44:00 PM

      Thank you so much, Deepa! I am happy that the twist worked.

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  24. Manali Desai10/10/2021 07:05:00 AM

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  25. Manali Desai10/10/2021 07:10:00 AM

    It made me think of that phrase.. 'Oh baby, if I'm going down, I'm taking you with me'...
    What a revenge

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    1. deepti menon10/12/2021 10:59:00 PM

      Well put, Manali! Exactly my sentiments as well! :)

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  26. Srikanth10/10/2021 11:36:00 AM

    All your stories are well written with a wonderful plot... Enjoyed reading through

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    1. deepti menon10/12/2021 11:00:00 PM

      Thank you once again, Srikanth! I am thrilled.

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